I need to fix my essay about the American Dream and The Great Gatspy. I’ll attach a file with it. So the new essay need to have Organizational transitions: The beginning with a strong thesis statement First, ( first body paragraph) Second, ( second body paragraph) Third, ( Third body paragraph) In summary, ( Conclusion ) The general topic of the paper is the American dream and its effects on one or more characters in The Great Gatsby. You will write a new overall opening paragraph. The thesis will have something to do with the idea that the American dream is a cause and there are effects of it–for better or worse. You will write from scratch the new five-paragraph segment, which is the second segment of your Paper 2, using cause and effect as your method of development. You will write a new overall closing paragraph. Elements of Organization I. Opening paragraph: It needs a thesis statement and an organizing idea. It should end with a statement of significance. IV. Closing paragraph: It needs a summary, a conclusion, and a hint of things to come. Look at the Evaluation Criteria lesson and the instructions for Paper 1 from more information about these three elements of an opening. Hint: If you end up writing the opening and closing of the paper at the end of the writing process, after you have written most of the two segments of the body of the paper, you would be right on task. Two-part Body: II. Note: This segment of the paper is basically a copy-and-paste from Paper 1. It has to be integrated into this new paper, Paper 2, but the basic content can be the same. Where I predict you will make some changes will be in II A and II E. Of course, you will make corrections and editing changes, but the content may be the same as Paper 1. A. A sub-thesis statement about the American dream in general terms but also in the context of the novel, and an organizing idea that states in three sentences what the three ideas are in II. B, C, and D. About 5-10 sentences. II A needs to support the overall thesis in I A. Notice that II is developed at the information level using examples and description. B. What is the American dream in general terms (but be prepared to relate your description to the novel)? (General) This will be about 20 sentences. C. What is the American dream in the novel? (More specifically) About 20 sentences. D. Relate the American dream to characters in the novel. (Even more specifically) About 20 sentences. Note: II B, C, and D basically should be copied and pasted from Paper 1. E. A closing that contains a summary that will restate what was covered in II B, C, and D. About 5-10 sentences and a sub-conclusion, which will be a restatement of the sub thesis in II A. 2. Methods of Development: Use description and example for this first segment (II) of the body of the paper. Mode of Order: The overall mode of order for this segment of the paper is general-to-specific; however, consider what the mode of order is for each section within the segment as well. 5. Transitions: Note: You need a very short transitional paragraph of one or more sentences to make the transition from informational level development to analysis. Avoid making reference to technical terms such as information-level, analysis, cause, effect, etc., in doing so. In other words, between II and III you need to write a one-sentence transitional paragraph that moves the reader from examples and description of the American dream to the consequences of the dream. III. This segment of the paper is developed at the analytical level using cause and effect. A. A sub-thesis that develops an idea about the American dream as a cause that has effects or consequences for characters in the novel. For the sub-thesis, develop the American dream as a cause. Notice that III is developed at the analytical level using cause and effects. About 5-10 sentences B. What is the effect of the American dream on a character in the novel? How does the American dream make this person behave? How does this person end up as a consequence of the dream? About 20 sentences C. What is a second effect of the American dream on that character in III B OR an effect on a second character? About 20 sentences D. What is a third effect of the American dream on that character in III B & C OR an effect on a third character? About 20 sentences When you discuss the three effects of the American dream, you could choose a major character, such as Gatsby or Carraway, and develop three effects of the dream on him, or you could choose three characters and develop the effects of the dream on those three characters, first one, then another, and then a third. Gatsby and Carraway are complicated characters who have stories that are developed more than some of the minor characters, so you could readily identify three different effects of the dream on them. They go through a number of stages. If you use more than one character, which is another way to do the assignment, you can isolate a single effect of the dream on each one of the three whom you have chosen. E. A closing that contains a sub-conclusion, which will be a restatement of the sub-thesis in IIIA, and a summary that will restate what was covered in III B, C, and D. About 5-10 sentences. About 5-10 sentences 2. Methods of Development: Use cause and effects for III, an analysis level development of the topic of this paper. Review cause and effect in Modules. 3. Mode of Order: The overall mode of order for this segment of the paper is time OR importance; however, consider what the mode of order is for each body-paragraph within the segment as well. 4. Mechanics: For a passing grade, review your paper for effective mechanics, with no more than four errors per page. Include two new quotes from The Great Gatsby, which makes a total of at least four quotes in Paper #2. Use a works cited page, referencing the novel, at least. Notice that it is “the American dream”: lower case “t” and “d.” Only the “A” is capitalized. Always underline the title of the novel, The Great Gatsby. You need to mention the author and the novel’s title once in the first sentence of the paper, but after that you can refer to him as Fitzgerald and to the novel as the “novel” to avoid repetitiveness. 5. Transitions: Use “first,” for the first five-paragraph segment of the body of the paper (II) and “second,” for the second five-paragraph segment of the body of the paper (III). Remember that you will have a one-sentence paragraph (one or two sentences) separating II from III. Use “In summary,” and “In conclusion,” in the closing. What transitions are you using to communicate your methods of development and your modes of order? Format: Double space the entire paper beginning with your last name and page number in the upper right-hand corner, ; note it on sample papers. Four-line heading: Remember to put English 101, Paper #2 and your section number at this point. Follow the style from Modules’ MLA. So the four-line heading will look like this, with two minor changes that are noted below after the English 101: Johnny Johnson Professor Sprague English 101, Paper #2, XXXX (or whatever your section number is) 4 November 2008 (or whatever the accurate date is). Use a title that hints at the thesis. Don’t try to write the title until your paper is over, so you can be sure that it hints at what the overall idea of the paper is. Indenting: Every time you indent, you indicate that a new paragraph is starting. Indents are about five spaces. Formal tone: Eliminate the use of the following: “I,” “me,” “my,” “mine”; “we,” “us,” “our,” “ours”; “you,” “your,” and “yours”). Formal exposition is not about us; it is about the topic that is being developed. Works Cited: This should be the last numbered page of your paper. Outline. For your outline for Paper #2, copy and paste your thesis statement, the two sub-thesis sentences for the two-segment body, and the conclusion onto a separate piece of paper at the end of your paper. It should be an unnumbered page because an outline is not part of MLA style. The outline is just for English 101. Use Roman numerals for the four pieces (I-IV). Study the Evaluation Criteria Lesson for additional information about how Paper#2 will be evaluated. Thus, your first paragraph, the opening, must have three elements: Thesis, Two Organizing Ideas, and Statement of Significance. Remember: Each time you indent five spaces you are indicating that a new paragraph starts. The three elements of your opening paragraph should be in one paragraph, your first. The two five-paragraph segments should have the following lengths: II. A. should be about 5-10 sentences II. B, C, and D should be about 20 sentences each (a total of about 60 sentences, just as in Paper #1) II. E. should be about 5-10 sentences They may be longer, if necessary. III. A. should be about 5-10 sentences III. B, C, and D should be about 20 sentences each (a total of about 60 sentences) III. E. should be about 5-10 sentences They may be longer if necessary In the second five-paragraph segment develop your overall opening thesis by effects as follows III B. The effect of the dream on one character OR the first of three effects on one of the major characters III C. The effect of the dream on a second character OR the second of three effects on one of the major characters III D. The effect of the dream on a third character OR the third of three effects on one of the major characters. Of course, you need a III A to open this segment and a III E to close this segment.